steps of life (new to this please tell me your thoughts )

[mike]

STEPS OF LIFE

Sitting at the steps of nature looking
 To a rise in creation, A place
Were I belong a place I have not gone.

And yet sitting here I look beyond
My journey and see it’s just begun,
And should I not take my self
To places I’ve not gone.

I may not find this place, this
Place were I belong, for the door
Has opened and some light
Shines through for time is
 Mine now and I know just what to do. 


So sit and be still my
Child and hear the path to take
Calling you it is, when your
Sitting at the steps of nature
Looking to a rise in creation

For it’s a place we all belong

[zondrae]

Hi Mike,

Welcome to the site. We are a pretty supportive bunch and friendly too. It is always great to have a new poet offering their work for us to read. It is a bit scary to put it 'out there' for general exhibition.  While I prefer rhyming verse, and still have a lot to learn about metre, I am drawn to the topic you have chosen.  We are all searching, in our own way, for that special place and that connection with the natural world.

Hope you enjoy the site and keep up the writing. Thanks for sharing.

[tomchap]

Welcome from me too, Mike.

I think we can all relate to those sentiments to some extent. Life is an unknown - especially when we try to look far into the future, but we all must make this journey.
Thanks for putting your poem up for public viewing, but this public is small and supportive, so it is not too scary.

A couple of spelling corrections I think:-
  Third line, first stanza-- were should be where
  Third line last stanza -- your seems to be an abbreviation for you are, therefore should be you're

A further comment: Bush poetry is predominantly regular rhythm and rhyme. I guess we all write in other styles than just 'bush', but most of what you'll find here is more of the bush poetry style.

Thanks for coming in -- looking forward to more of your work

Cheers
Tom

[therese]

welcome mike. what a lovely poem. 
yes, its a little scary putting your poems up on the boards.  but you'll find friendly advice and help in here. 
i hope you stay around, and continue to share with us all.

[Bernard de Silva]

"Evening Mike,
                   thanks for a thought provoking poem...
                                                      Cheers Mate, and welcome,
                                                                                          Bernie.

[Irene]

Hi Mike,
Welcome to the site - hope you enjoy it.
Like Zondrae - I also prefer rhyming poetry as I grew up with the australian classics of Ogilvie, Paterson, Lawson, etc and enjoy the rhyme and rhythm that goes with them - but I also found your poem to be very thought provoking. Your message came through very clearly.

Great to see new 'faces' join the site and start posting.

Irene

[mike]

Thank you all for your positive and friendly responses to my poem …..