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« on: April 07, 2007, 04:55:35 PM » |
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Holding Forever With You
(c) Manfred Vijars - April 2007
I scan the wide horizon - where once we rode together
soaking in the view of the fields up to the trees;
and watching you out riding - graceful as a feather.
Then turning to the veranda to drink your memories.
While sitting here a melancholy mood descends again -
reflecting how and what it is that really makes us whole.
Your presence here still lingers – holds on tighter than a rein;
amazed a touch so tender could shake me to my soul
We dreamed of our forevers - how we promised, how we cared;
we laughed and sang and planned and built but then you went away.
I look around and see your touch on all the things we've shared.
I promised you forever - so forever you will stay.
The sparkles of my heart have been dulled for quite a while;
Then I see the seeds we've sown Oh my darling how they've grown.
They're both sitting on my lap - with your eyes and with your smile
Yes, I’m holding our forevers so I’ll never be alone.
The last love of a man is a lucky girl you see;
but far more so if she could claim the treasure.
I want you to know wherever you may be
I'm still holding our forever - an overflowing measure -
I'm here holding our forevers with you
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« Last Edit: April 07, 2007, 04:57:53 PM by manfredvijars »
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Work hard, play fair and look after your mate and we'll "Waltz with Matilda" some more.
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« Reply #1 on: April 08, 2007, 01:43:27 AM » |
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G'day Manfred,
really like this old Mate, in particular the line, " I promised you for ever...so for ever you will stay".
Strange for me, for I'm not one for the 'mush' [a pox upon her and her lawyers if she left...not passed away], but it's a seriously good write.
The only two lines I find questionable...not in meaning but in wording construction, are the last line of verse one and the wrap up line at the end of the piece..but that's just me...it's a meaningful write...
Geezus---seriously reading 'mush' and offering minor critique...a bloke must be coming down with something...
Cheers old Mate,
Bernie.
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« Last Edit: April 08, 2007, 02:06:03 AM by Bernard de Silva »
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« Reply #2 on: April 11, 2007, 04:49:42 PM » |
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... thanks for your kind comments Bernie. Been churning out a bit of mush lately too. Thanks for your observations too Mate ... maybe Ric should open a section for: Bernies Critiques? (be a good job too) ...
Onya Mate,
Manfred.
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« Reply #3 on: April 11, 2007, 04:54:09 PM » |
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Hi Manfred, I'm guessing that your lady must have died by the sad tone of the poem? Very sweet and beautiful ...
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Sing along now ... Oh! The old grey mare, she ain't what she used to be ... ain't what she used to be ...
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« Reply #4 on: April 12, 2007, 01:55:31 AM » |
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... Thanks Kimbo. I'm glad you're heading down to Bundy, I may need you to hold me up again this year too....   |
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« Reply #5 on: April 12, 2007, 03:36:03 AM » |
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Oh my gosh!  MANFRED, WHAT HAVE YOU DONE?  Now everyone will know what I look like - I was quite happy being invisible! I want everyone to know that Manfred and I are both WAAAAY better looking that in that photo! Well, OK, that IS Manfred's intelligentest face, but I'm better looking that that ... aren't I?  (Actually, truth be told, I've put on weight since that photo, so perhaps I'd better be happy with that one)  |
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« Reply #6 on: April 12, 2007, 06:42:26 AM » |
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... thought it is a great pickie of you Kimbo ... but what are you doing standing next to a wombat's bum?
(should I remove it?)
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Work hard, play fair and look after your mate and we'll "Waltz with Matilda" some more.
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« Reply #7 on: April 12, 2007, 06:47:49 AM » |
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Nah, it's OK Manfred. They may as well know what freaks they are chatting to ... |
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« Reply #8 on: April 12, 2007, 07:03:44 AM » |
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No. It's nice to see that real people are out there. And I often thought, by some of your comments Manfred, that your avatar was a couple of summers out of date - confirmed. No offense mate, just a sign of greater maturity.
Cheers,
Tom
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« Reply #9 on: April 12, 2007, 07:08:17 AM » |
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Hey Kimbo, didn't realise you were such a good sort, but that derelict beside you looks like he found Bernie's rum stash. Can just imagine him reciting "Starkle starkle little twink"
Great shot
heyu
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« Reply #10 on: April 12, 2007, 07:20:28 AM » |
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Starkle starkle little twink
Think I need another dwink
If I stumble, help me up,
fill me up another cup ...
is that how it goes?
I love that "starke, starkle little twink" bit ... I'm still giggling!
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« Reply #11 on: April 12, 2007, 07:55:59 AM » |
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its a nice piccie kym and manfred. did you enjoy you own little mini-meet?
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« Reply #12 on: April 12, 2007, 08:09:35 AM » |
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"Mini-meet"? There is nothing "mini" about Manfred OR me! That photo was taken after the Bundy comp under John and Sandy Lee's house - there was about 50 other people there too! It was a really fun night. Even I got up to say a poem. Missed out about 6 verses so none of it made sense, but most of them were half-tanked "kinda-happy" so it didn't matter anyway!
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« Reply #13 on: April 12, 2007, 03:12:27 PM » |
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Hey Kym, give this one a try after a few sherbets.
Starkle starkle little twink
who the hell you are you think
I'm not under the alcofluence of inkerhol
tho' some thinkle peep I am
I fool so feelish, I don't know who is me
but the drunker I sit here the longer I get.
How come there's two of you Officer?
heyu
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« Reply #14 on: April 13, 2007, 01:55:55 AM » |
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Welcome to the new Manfred,
Now, if you had been able to make the National I might have recognised you. I'm not sure if my photo is a true likeness. For want of anything else to offer I'll post 'The Reflection'
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'A Woman of Words' ...... Zondrae
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