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Khadizia
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« on: January 25, 2010, 09:55:55 PM »

He fanned the fire to a warming blaze with his old Akubra hat,
with its sweat stained band and grimy brim it had done a lot of that...
It had shared his life on the outback run, as he worked mustering stock,
and offered welcome shade from the midday heat, held water for his dogs.
He had paid in blood and tears and sweat, over dry and arid years.
The hat shared dreams as they came and went, even shared his secret fears.
But he loved the life and his outback land and it gets no better than that.
Save a warm and cheery campfire and an old Akubra hat.

His hat was old, his jeans were worn and the RM boots battered too
But that’s OK they were like him, all proven tried and true.
They were considered special friends, reliable and strong.
Unpretentious and hardwearing through days of work so long.
He didn’t ask for much from life, a warm bed and a feed.
A roof to keep the weather out and good mates fulfilled his needs.
On a sunny day resting in the shade, he was happy with his lot.
Taking time to roll a smoke and drink his tea from a quart pot.

A smoke, a beer, fresh damper, and a fire on the coldest nights.
Yarns shared with mates around the coals, beneath the bright moonlight.
Tomorrow they would rise again, before the dawning of the day
 in the coldest part of morning, they’d saddle up and get away.
All rugged up against the chill, though still half asleep and cold.
To muster stock before they moved away from the waterholes.
But now they yarned around the fire, enjoyed a smoke and idle chat,
whilst he fanned the fire to a warming blaze with his old Akubra hat.

Maureen Clifford  ©
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« Reply #1 on: January 26, 2010, 07:21:59 AM »

G'day Maureen

This is a really well thought out poem. (Now this next bit is MHO only, tell me to 'go jump' if you like) As this is an older piece of work, I'm sure that if you examine it closley, you'll see what I see. You know enough to polish this poem up and get the metre spot on. It only needs just a little brush up to go from good to great. I have not looked really closley but I did spot one singular/plural rhyme, and a spot where you could simply drop a word or two to realighn the metre and not lose the meaning. In any case I like it. Thanks for sharing it with us.

A fitting Australia Day poem.
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« Reply #2 on: January 26, 2010, 08:16:31 AM »

Thanks Zondrae..you are right and I will have a look at this it could do with a shine....it has been sitting in my file for a few years....actually wrote it about my ex...describes him to a t...his old Akubra was without a doubt the most disreputable hat I ever saw but you couldn't part him from it.  It actually had a hole worn through on the crown from taking it on and off so often, and he always used it to get the fire going which is where this poem came from.
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« Reply #3 on: January 27, 2010, 01:41:21 PM »

A wonderful poem KS. You might like to post it on the AKUBRA fan group site on Facebook Huh Huh Huh
They would love it. Wink Wink Wink
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